maybe I’m the one left behind
as the world moves in hurrying paces
or the first at the seashore –
lone survivor of this mammoth wreck?
maybe I’m just another grown toddler
who marks time on wobbling feet
or just an adept swimmer
who glides ahead of the herd
giddy. these sands are shifting.
am I a tossed coin on a gambler's table or
another Gulliver who lost his map?
as the world moves in hurrying paces
or the first at the seashore –
lone survivor of this mammoth wreck?
maybe I’m just another grown toddler
who marks time on wobbling feet
or just an adept swimmer
who glides ahead of the herd
giddy. these sands are shifting.
am I a tossed coin on a gambler's table or
another Gulliver who lost his map?
109 comments:
i'm first, yipeee. now i'm goin bak 2 read
'maybe I’m just another grown toddler
who marks time on wobbling feet
perhaps I’m an adept swimmer
who glides ahead of the herd'
it is ok to be both...
lost you say...but there can be adventure when trying to find your way back...and think of all the little new friends one can make!
Lovely verse
'these sands are shifting' have you ever seen kayaking, or heard the song on christ the solid rock i stand. The earth beneath you is always bound to shift, we all learn to glide and steady ourselves by holding on to what lies ahead.
beautiful aloofaa, deep and it brings up questions in my head
6th...not bad...I am def getting better...
Ok...creepy...but u an I seem to be in the same place...
Nicely put together as always Mr Aloofer.
i'll be there to find u, dont worry! *winks*
nicely written..
is it d rains dat is dampening everyone's mood or what?
nice poem though
Great poem...the sands are shifting, huh? That's way deep!
A swimmer who glides ahead of the herd.Atleast there will be someone to look back ;)
I like it...how you have portrayed different images for the same subject.
What is the world are you talking about?
You and Kemmie belong together.
"Swim with the herd"?
how dare u aloofar?
infact, i think u are lost!
how can u update and not tell me so i can be first when we were here chatting!
my face is swollen and going red!!!!!!!!!!!!
nicely written. i think dis feelin is one experienced by ppl at sum stage in life tho.
I am an adept swimmer, hoping one day to return to the shifting sand shores...and praying to glide ahead of the herd...
Nice nice nice. Pardon me,I just had to do my own remix
Nice verse. Mr Aloofar the weaver. I'm sure you will find your way, bro.
nicely written
well that kinda describes me right now.......I guess i am in that "lost" phase...
Tossed coin.
Just make sure u decide which side u land on.
lol at Tobenna's comment. Nice verse. And simple but deep enough to keep me awake at night. K
Swim on swimmer. lol.
sadly I'm an illiterate when it comes to poems :(
You sure have a way with words. Beautiful.
u're not a tossed coin and u sure did not miss u map.
u're aloofar...
aloofing far and wide, dropping ur seeds of talent.
beautiful piece. me likey.
You are such a good writer! Oh please teach me to write like you! Seriously though...
I feel you joh!!! been feeling lost lately honestly.
Maybe...maybe you're only just a product of your imagination?
Nice one...:)
...beautiful...i think i may be in a somewhat similar place...
you can do a lot to stand out from the crowd without being 'removed' from it.
you can do a lot to stand firm on your feet and not dwell on uncertainty.
I'm not too excited about flipping coins...
this might sound corny but i always get lost in your words...seriously great imagery.
perhaps u're map is not lost, instead, it just needs to be modified by you and approved by the Big Boss.
Im votinf Gulliver who lost his map
Still can't seem to be first on this blog!
Chai! Im lost.
really nice..hehe
Once u find urself lost
pick urself up and get found again...
I've been told that I'm some sort of a control freak - always wanting to be on top of goings-on. I don't necessarily like suprises. Hence, the 12 seconds of suspense while the coin is doing backflips, don't really float my boat. lol.
ehn? ko ti sii update ni?
While everybody says brilliant things about Aloofar's brilliant post, I welcome myself to this brilliant blog. Wow! why did I think Aloofar would be female?
Ok, considering this is my first reading your posts, I'll say I'm lost too. But I'm sure with time the shifting sand will settle and I'll find my footing.
Thanks for dropping by, btw.
wooo don't sweat it
i'm lost tooo
lol
i like
Nice one...i like the way you spin your words!
I guess we all have times we feel like we're lost or we're alone but we're never really alone...take all our friends on blogville for instance!
Cheers
Nice. This is titled "lost" and I just finish another one from Adorable titled "losing myself". I will go and post "No more loss"
FQ definately is another gulliver who's lost her map. although i have arrived in the lands of giants, i shall not be trampled upon. for though lost i'll surely find my way back...i guess we all feel this way.
i'm a 007 agent and i think i might found you on facebook(afro's page?) he he. see so you aren't lost...i think
I am gonna find you....
Aloofar as usual, lost! I wish I could help. Seriously! Plus, I'm wondering where to leave u comments henceforth: Mine, Speechgirl's or Urs?
excellent!!!
Oh dear. Sometimes we feel lost once in a while but you will find your way am sure.
Great lyrics.
Ah I remember that book Gullivers travel. Aloof and far, lets talk. You're into advertising so you'll know what am on abt. I dont know what stage advertsing is in Nija but here they used to sell to a mass market then they moved to a niche market and now its all about symbolisation, emotionalisation and individualisation. Everything is assumption. The world is moving this way therefore it will be easier to sell to them as a group with similar interests and identity. Until they discovered wait a minute not everyone is the same and they changed tactics. Have still they got it right? I doubt.
My point? Well thing is we can never be the same, pace, intellect everything. We live in the same whole world. The populace maybe moving vertically but it doesn't mean if you move horizontally there's something wrong with you. Find your pace in whatever pace you are able to and you will soon come to your own. Take care love...and we're still friends. Dont go doing a MIA on me!
My apologies, I shall be patient while you search.
Nice. I suppose it can be difficult to tell where you stand in relation to others sometimes. But I think it's best not to give a rats ar$e really and do your own thing...
You have a way with the words, nice.
Long time!
waiting for ur revisit... K
Isn’t that why it is called life?
We are all lost on this planet trying to find purpose!
Keep searching, you are almost there!
How u dey?
u make me do things i dont ordinarily do eg ream poems.
isnt a survivor one who was 'left behind' by death.
left alone with his tragedy.
btw liked ur stuff!
bros a are u blogging from an unknown island ni?
eventually, "lost one",you'll find your way.
I just read,David Sedaris "Me, Talkj Pretty someday".super fab sense of humour, good read. go get it!
Nice, touching poem.
After "Lost" comes "Found".
BTW, the olympics is still on. Chance to get a gold medal for being an adept swimmer.
My darling, rest ur head in my bossom and talk 2 me. Hehe.
Miss you oo
really creative writing....fo sho
I am lost at the moment, but I am trying to find my way.
Everyine can relate with this post...and being lost at one point ...many points in life.
What's important is that you find out where you are as quickly as possible or go back the way you came and restrategize.
Aloofar, you know you can.
My brother, its always gonna be like that, get used to it. Hheheheh Human beings aint gonna change and neither is the world. But not to worry, there are many of us...heheheheh miserable beings still trying to figure out what the fuck is going on...heheheh so, you are not alone.
well versed and I see a lot of accolades anyways....add my best wishes to it!!:)
Scribblers Inc.
aLOOFAR you fink differently for Vera to be under aloofar.Hmmm serious ere kere. (lol)
Once I read someone I know say: "It's useless trying to label yourself."
I kinda agree with him, but not totally. Because when you try to compare yourself with "The World", you do yourself a crime. You try to bring yourself down to the level of the common.
But what is a label? it is used to describe you, not define you. So when you try to find out what you are and where you stand in the world, it's not your perspective, it's the world's perspective you're looking at.
But do the opposite, and you're a strung arrow. Label yourself to be what you want to be, from your perspective, and you will become that.
P.S. Excuse me for the huge comment, couldn't help myself. :D
Hehehehe,mwahhhhh x 2...
How body?
One word describes this blog: "CREATIVE." You've got a really great mind!
worthy of a booker prize, that.
In response to ur request on ma blog...
Come closer baby!! ill be gentle...i promise. they r soft. ask and they'll tell u..
lol. i had better be careful b4 they label me blogville ashi..
pele o, oko iyawo, na you and your gf, i go beat together, if una haras me for update again.
reading another book "Aphrodite" by Isabel Allende, funny and sensual, *cough* could foster you and green eye's affair.
Nice...
(thanks for stopping by)
i feel ur drift with this poem my man....
Nice poem, I think. It reads very cool and I think you have a great future as a writer!
i like
digging the imagery man
I love ur mind, aloofar.
Your mind, i said o!
Hope say u don found now,lol!
It's a very nice poem. I like it very much. And if it was about you, I would say you are the first at the seashore and the adept swimmer who glides ahead of the herd.
Hey Salty, just made a link to this post. Hope it's okay?
Hey Salty, just linked your previous post to mine. Hope its okay?
So are you found yet dude?
You need to be at the SBR o! Check my blog for details.
this is great
nice work!!!
UPDATE!!!!!!
Must I come here and scream every time????
Aloofar, don't piss me off oh. Don't make me --- in fact, I won't bother saying what I will do to you.
Men you get talent oh! Sorry I havent been blogging cause I am in Abuja and goodness gracious the internet is so darn slow! I must blog soon!
Dis is really nice.Life has its different phases and I hope u find ur self soon
Thanx for the comment...nice blog you have here too.
Love the way you write, will definately read more often.
thanks for stopping by my blog. muchas gracias.
btw, this post...brilliant and a tad too deep for my comprehension:-)
daddy when r u updatin o???
UPDATE!!!!
UPDATE!!!!!
DO UR WORST!!!
Wetin you fit do???
Update now??? haba...this one is too much of a break o. I have a present for u. As soon as u update ask me for it.
hmmmm....the depth of this poem is too gravitating!!! is just all part of life i guess ;)
guy ow do u do it?92 comments?u too mush jor!....ur poem is so deep I'm lost!
is dis u or u jst writing?
u never find urself????
nice
There's something about that poem that scarily reminds me of myself.
I am soooo late to the party.
Hmmm, I often wander along the same lines of thought...
nawa o...97 comments..i think this is my first time here and i am already overwhelmed...i wonder how u people do it..lol
this your poem is deep o...
thanks for stopping by mine.
You're not only lost, you're also lonely. Good Job Chris
The poem is nice. I've done a remix of it. Can I post it here?
where u dey?
CBN is looking for that tossed coin so better give it back!
Here goes the remix...
THE ODD ONE
maybe i'm the odd one
the one left behind as the world moves in hurrying paces
or the first at the seashore – the
lone survivor of this mammoth wreck?
maybe i'm the odd one
just another grown toddler who marks time on wobbling feet
perhaps I’m an adept swimmer
who glides ahead of the herd
maybe i'm the odd one
a tossed coin on a gambler's table the cowed villian
another Gulliver who lost his map?
very interesting verse, and deep too!
and i am 104th! clap for me, MILO!lol
I got you, then you slipped through my fingers. Where are you?
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:)
Very DEEEP! You have a creative mind! Thanks for stopping by.
Hi back. First time on your blog, you really are quite quirky aren't you? I identify with this poem so much it is quite freaky.
so cool...but can you be found??..lol
xx
Solo.
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